I need some criticing...

halo0001 · Post by **halo0001** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:15 pm

I made that in about 2 hrs...just needed some opinions about it!

Yodel · Post by **Yodel** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:24 pm

Try making the Star of David transition from a tranquil gray-green on the right, to a fiery black-orange om the left, just to show the contrast.

Should look nice.

halo0001 · Post by **halo0001** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:27 pm

ill give that a try when i get back home thinks for the suggestion.

Yodel · Post by **Yodel** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:29 pm

There's a weird color stripe at the bottom and top. And the picture has a seam.

Fix that, too.

Danke · Post by **Danke** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:56 pm

Seems like it's hard to read.
The stripes could be a little less transparent.

Veegie · Post by **Veegie** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 5:00 pm

Yodel wrote:There's a weird color stripe at the bottom and top. And the picture has a seam.

Fix that, too.

Flag.

-Legendary- · Post by **-Legendary-** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 6:21 pm

The star isn't in the middle.

WaeV · Post by **WaeV** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 6:34 pm

I like the star one solid color, but I might change my mind if you do a good job editing it.

RaVNzCRoFT · Post by **RaVNzCRoFT** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 6:55 pm

Danke wrote:Seems like it's hard to read.
The stripes could be a little less transparent.

Nah, the text is fine to read. It's a fundamental prayer of Judaism, so you know what it says even if some particular spots are hard to see.

I like how you put the Shema in there. Clever concept.

SHOUTrvb · Post by **SHOUTrvb** » Thu Oct 02, 2008 7:57 pm

Don't take this the wrong way, but what all did you even do? I like the image as a whole; although the text bugs me. Not for any real design-flaw reason though.

halo0001 · Post by **halo0001** » Fri Oct 03, 2008 3:52 am

just to clarify the reason why I made this is that me and my friend are doing a yom kippur project (Day of Atonement) your supposed to be charitable that day so were selling t-shirts and giving the profits back to our local synagogue, i just wanted to make sure the graphic was perfect before i made the shirt.

SHOUTrvb · Post by **SHOUTrvb** » Fri Oct 03, 2008 5:56 am

SHOUTrvb wrote:Don't take this the wrong way, but what all did you even do? I like the image as a whole; although the text bugs me. Not for any real design-flaw reason though.

Also, it's a little chaotic for a shirt don't you think? I would stick with simply the flag and text for the shirt, and maybe just leave out the image altogether. Or you might could even stick it on the back.